Original draft:
On the first day, we met our class teacher Mr Wong, we
thought he would be very strict to us. After one week, we found Mr Wong was
very nice! We like this secondary school and we like to be in 1A. This is a
good school and 1A is very good. The teachers in this school are very kind and
nice and our classmates are also kind, friendly and nice. We like each other
very much.
Revised draft (with the help of a thesaurus):
On the first day, we met our class teacher Mr Wong, we
thought he would be very strict to us. After one week, we found Mr Wong was
very amiable! We appreciate this secondary school and we are pleased to be in
1A. This is a wonderful school and 1A is very admirable. The teachers in this
school are very kind and welcome and our classmates are also kind, friendly and
well-manned. We cherish each other very much.
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